Dear Seattle,
I will correct your autobiography. If it is for a resume for a job it should betuned to that use. As is, there is too much that an employer won't have time to
read. Most resumes should not be over one page in length.
I have put it here as a root article so that others can learn from it, too. :-)
Best wishes in your endeavours, Mary
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ORIGINAL
AUTOBIOGRAPHYMy name is xxx, xxx, Chinese. I was born in QuanZhou---International Garden City
of. Mentioning my hometown, I am proud of it.
I come from the xxx. I am diligent, hard study and honest .My family is poor, but I live in a harmony, warm and sincere family. I love my parents because they teach me the whole world. I begin primary studied at the age of 9 in XXX Primary
School. My parent didn抰 have well education background, but in order to let me receive a better education. My father helps me to enter into the school of QuanZhou. In the year 1995, I studied in The Third Junior Middle School in QuanZhou
of Fujian Province. Under my diligent, under my father's encourage. I received
the admission notice of First Senior High School of QuanZhou. I cherished the chance very much, and studied very hard in senior high school.
Under my diligent, I received the admission notice from TSL school of Business and Information Technology (TSBIT), DongHai, QuanZhou Normal University in the year 2002. And my major is international economy and trade .My father told me I am
the honor of our family. I should be study even harder than before in college .
So with this word I beginning my university study life.
With the courage of my father and to make my father抯 dream come true, which is
winning honor for the family? On the day of September 1st, I am beginning the college life. Now, let me introduce the main personal information of the university as follows.
During the campus study life, I participated in the Communist Party of China?training and passed the test in November of 2003. I strictly with my action and pay close attention to current events. I have an independent opinion and thought.
I broaden my knowledge constantly and pay attention to the combination of the theory and practice. I try my best to master major courses, especially in foreign
trade, e-commerce, CRM, marketing. And obtain CHENSHOUREN Scholarship and TAOXINBO Scholarship. In spare time, I participated in various kinds of activities, and was appointed as the director of school, commercial association, Vice-president, the minister of TSBIT institute association department, the Vice-president of case study association. And obtain 揳ctivity activist?award and Best Award
of 換uanZhou youth starting-business and design elite? At the same time I am
challenging myself constantly. I have a better social practical experience. I have been work in 揈-NET Shoes information Express & Technology Center as a marketer to open-up shoe market. I have been work in 揑ntegrated Solutions Technology（QuanZhou）Co., Ltd., ISTQZ,?as a part-time job. During working time, I am responsibility and positive. I would give detail information about me.
Firstly, Study situation. The campus life is a big turning point of my life, I studied diligent and possessed the necessary ability. To my major study, they are
E-commerce, Foreign Trade, Business English, CRM, Economy, Managing, Marketing,
Investment, Mathematics, Statistics etc. Besides, I have passed the International Business Documentary Certificate. To my English level, I have been passed both the College English Test(CET) Band 4 and College English Test(CET) Band 6 .Besides, I have received Third place award of National English Contest For College
Students. To my computer level, I can operate various kinds of office software,
such as Word, Excel, etc. I have certain foundations skill in dealing with Photoshop, webpage design (Dream weaver), PowerPoint. I think I can do better in English area, foreign trade, Negotiation and Communication.
Secondly, school experience. From November, 2002 to November 2004, I am the Director and Vice-president of Business Association of QZTC. In the days of vice-president, I assisted the president in general office management, conducted meetings and negotiated with local company for donating towards expenses for the activities. Of course I also conducted the association members to visit their company.
From November，2004 to February，2005 , I was one of the volunteers
in English Study Center. I help freshman with their studies in the English language, especially in oral English.
During April 2004 to January，2005, I was the minister of association department
of TSBIT. In the days of work，I was in charging of newly setup association and
conducting the feasibility of the association. Besides, I supervised their activity principle.
I am in honor of my CHANGQINTENG Studio. It was established on 6th September, 2004. Three of us established the studio for the purpose of serving classmates and
schoolmates. We provided kinds of Electric Dictionaries, MP3 and Computers, etc
. We organized a group of 20 persons to exploit the market of college school, especially the QZTC in DongHai. We gave direct directions and products to the group members to sale in the whole school. And pay the extra salary to them. Besides
I was the agent of 揌wap co., ltd., XINFEN branch?in QZTC. As an agent in school, I was Responsible for exploring the student抯 market and hold exhibitions
.
Thirdly, work experience. I have been work in 揑ntegrated Solutions Technology&#
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QuanZhou）Co., Ltd., ISTQZ?as a part-time job and work in 揈-NET Shoes Information Express & Technology Center? In the days of ISTQZ, I was responsible for
the demand analysis of finance system, especially in asset system. I have familiar with the E-commerce and know how to analysis a demand system. In the days of
E-NET, I learnt the importance of exploit knew market and the ways. I also learnt the important of team work.
The following is the awards I have been received in school.
2002-2003 TAOXINBO Scholarship recipients, TSBIT
2003-2004 CHENSHOUREN Scholarship recipients, TSBIT
Third place award, National English Contest for College Students, June 2003.
First place award, social practice thesis on winter vocation, October 2003.
Third place award, social practice thesis on summer vocation, October 2004.
Advanced individual award, Social work thesis on summer vocation, October 2004.
Activity activist award, Student Association, October 2004.
2003-2004 Three-virtues student award, QZTC.
First place award, Design&Starting business Competition of QZTC
. March 2005.
Bestly Award, QuanZhou youth starting-business and design elite
, April 2005.
I am very task-oriented，aggressive. In approaching new challenging I can work both single-handedly and in a team with a great deal of zest. I used to set goals to keep motivating and high efficient. I get along well with my boss, coordinate and subordinators. I think I can adapt knew environment quickly.
I am in honor of TSBIT. I learnt not only study but also practice during three
years university life. But, I know there are difference between school and society. I know the importance of practice to a graduating student. I believe to understand myself is become more important. At present my knowledge is not enough and lack of practice, especially foreign trade knowledge, management knowledge still stay on theory. I still lack the ability to control the whole environment system, Lack of analysis the compete environment. To my inferior position, I will
pay more attention in the future and make progress. I think I will prepare better of step into the society.
Now, it is time to start social practice. One year latter I will step into my
career life. I would still pursue my aim and try my best to make it come true. I
hope through my learning knowledge and practice experience. I can catch each chance and use my sweat to establish a bridge between realistic society and my dream. I believe tomorrow is another starting point.
My motto is today must borrow nothing of tomorrow!
Think before you start!
ONE MAN NO MAN！！ TKS！
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TO WHOM IT MAY CONCERN: Street address
City, Province
Date: _________
Your Name Here
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POSITION SOUGHT _____________________________________________
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PERSONAL INFORMATION
I am Chinese, born in QuanZhou--the International Garden City of _____________ .
I now live in xxx.
I am diligent, honest, and I study hard. My family is poor but we are a harmonious, warm and sincere family. I love my parents because they taught me about the
whole world and how to live.
EARLY SCHOOLING
I began primary school at 9, and attended the XXX Primary School in
________. My parent don't have an educated background, but in order for me to
me receive a good education my father entered me in the school of QuanZhou.
1995: studied at The Third Junior Middle School in QuanZhou, Fujian Province. Through diligence and my father's encouragement was admitted to the First Senior
High School of QuanZhou. I cherished the chance, and studied very hard.
2002: diligence and encouragemen rewarded with invitation to the TSL school of
Business and Information Technology (TSBIT) at DongHai, QuanZhou Normal University.
BUSINESS SCHOOL MAJOR: International Economy and Trade.
My father regards me as the honor of our family. His trust caused me to study harder than before in the business school. I was well armed by his courage and my
ardent desire to make his dream that I would win honor for our family come true.
On September 1st I began college life.
BASIC UNIVERSITY INFORMATION
a. participated in the Communist Party of China抯 training programme.
Passed the test in November, 2003.
* Strict with my actions
* Pay close attention to current events
* Have independent opinions and thoughts
* Seek constantly to broaden my knowledge base
* Pay close attention to the combination of theory and practice
Spare time activities. Appointed as
*Director of the School Commercial Association
*Vice-president and Minister of TSBIT Institute Association Department
*Vice-president of the Case Study Association
Constantly challenge myself and obtained excellent social and practical experience through the following activities:
E-NET Shoes Information Express & Technology Center as
marketer to open up the shoe market.
Part time work in 揑ntegrated Solutions Technology "QuanZhou Co.,
Ltd., ISTQZ,?
At work I easily accept responsibility and am a positive force
DETAILED INFORMATION
a. Study situation
Campus life was a big turning point in my life. I studied diligently and
quickly found that I possessed the necessary abilities to excell
Majors: E-commerce
Foreign Trade
Business English
CRM
Economy
Management
Marketing
Investment
Mathematics
Statistics
Passed the International Business Documentary Certificate.
b. English Levels Passed
* College English (CET) Band 4
* College English (CET) Band 6
c. Computer level
* Operate various office software including Word amd Excel
* Foundational skills in Photoshop
* Webpage design (Dream weaver)
* PowerPoint
My skills would best be used in
* English
* Foreign trade
* Negotiations
* Communications
2. SCHOOL EXPERIENCE:
a. November 2002 -- November 2004
* Director and vice-president of the Business Association of QZTC
* During vice-presidency assisted the president with
-General office management
-Conducted meetings
-Negotiated donations for expenses with a local company
-Encouraged association members to visit their company
b. November 2004 -- February 2005
* Volunteer in the English Study Center
-Assisted freshman with English studies, especially oral English
c. April 2004 -- January 2005
* Minister of Association Department of TSBIT.
-In charge, new Association
-In charge, feasibility study of Association
-Supervised activity principle
d. CHANGQINTENG Studio established 6th September, 2004.
Three of us established the studio for the purpose of serving all students.
* Provided various Electronic Dictionaries
MP3's, Computers, other equipment.
* Organized group of 20 students to exploit college market,
-Especially QZTC in DongHai.
* Directions and products to group members for sale in the school
-Paid sales people extra salaries
e. Sole agent for 揌wap co., ltd., XINFEN branch?in QZTC.
* As agent was responsible to
-Explore student market
-Hold exhibitions
3. WORK EXPERIENCE
Part time work: INTEGRATED SOLUTIONS TECHNOLOGY, QuanZhou Co., Ltd., (ISTQZ)
Work: E-NET SHOES INFORMATION EXPRESS 8 TECHNOLOGY CENTER
ISTQZ: responsible for
* Demand analysis of finance system, especially asset system
* Familiarity with E-commerce
E-NET Shoes Information Express & Technology Center
* Learned importance and procedures for exploiting new markets
* Learned importance of team work
ACHIEVEMENTS AND AWARDS RECEIVED
2002-2003 TAOXINBO Scholarship recipient TSBIT
2003-2004 CHENSHOUREN Scholarship recipients TSBIT
2003 June National English Contest for College Students (third place)
2003 Oct. Social practice thesis on winter vocation2004 Oct. Social practice thesis on summer vocation2004 Oct. Social work thesis on summer vocation (advanced individual award)
2004 Oct. Activity Activist Award, Student Association2003-2004 Three-virtues Student Award, QZTC2005 Mar. Design & Starting Business Competition QZTC2005 Apr. Bestly Award, QuanZhou Youth Starting-business and Design Elite
BUSINESS QUALITIES
* Am task-oriented and aggressive.
* Approaching new challenges I easily work single-handed and/or in a
team with great zest.
* Am used to setting goals to stay motivated and highly efficient.
* Get along well with boss, coordinator and subordinates.
* Believe that I can easily and quickly adapt to new environments.
* Honor TSBIT where I learned not only to study but also to
practice during three years of university life
CONTINUING GOALS
* Understand there are differences between school and society
* Know the importance of practice after graduation
* Believe to understand myself is important
SELF CRITICISM
* Current knowledge is not enough yet, and I lack practice, especially in
foreign trade knowledge and management knowledge. I must depend on theory
for now.
* Need to gain ability to control the whole environmental system
* Need to gain ability to do analyses of compete environments
In future will attend to these lacks and continue my present progress.
Through learning, knowledge and practical experience I will use each
chance that becomes available and spend my energy to establish a bridge
between the world of reality and the world of my dreams.
I believe each tomorrow is a new starting point.
My chief mottos are
* "Today must borrow nothing from tomorrow!"
* "Think before you start!"
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