这是我同学写的一首歌,帮忙看看哪里错了!

A grey night(送给我喜欢女孩。。）

Now,we are together

Sitting outside in the sunshine

But soon we be apart

And soon it be night at noon

Now ,things are fine

The clouds are far away ,up in the sky

But soon I be on a plane

And soon,you feel the cold rain

You promised to stay in touch when we part

You promised before I left that you alway love me

Time goes by and people cry

And everything goes too fast

A grey night(送给我喜欢女孩。。）

Now,we are together

Sitting outside in the sunshine

But soon we be apart

And soon it be night at noon

Now ,things are fine

The clouds are far away ,up in the sky

But soon I be on a plane

And soon,you feel the cold rain

You promised to keeep in touch when we are part

You promised before I left that you would alway love me

Time goes by and people cry

And everything goes too fast