Dear Feihuasimeng,
You English in your reply post is quite good already, however, it would appear to be far better if you had set it up as I'm setting it up for you, below. I will
note any important things you should adjust after your re-set up post.
Warmly, Mary
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Dear friends,
In her post Mary said, "None of you should be ashamed of your English. If anybody ever makes you feel ashamed or makes mean fun of you, then I hope you realize
that they are brazen, unkind and uncouth." How kind these words are! I like Hongen, and especially this forum, because people here are nice and kind. This helps me feel at home. I'm not ashamed of my English any longer because I know if I
make mistakes there will always be someone to help me correct them. When my ideas are wrong, there will always some kind friend to suggest better ones.
As I make progress in written English I also gain encouragement from gaining stars. I still remember when I posted my first message here. I received two stars.
It encouraged me so much that I have liked it here ever since.
There are many names that have become familiar to me, such as 3Pan, Tim, David,
Mary, Jenny, and so on. In my heart they are all very kind and have wisdom. Their English is very good, yet I have never seen them laugh at others because of the other's poor English. I don't know who they are, but I regard them
as my friends and teachers. Thanks to the people here I became interested in English writing, although I can only do it in my free time. I find I prefer to share ideas, rather than just to read those of others.
I hope everyone who wants to improve their English will become more confident and enjoy themselves by coming here. I think these kind people will help us a lot.
Sincerely, Feihuasimeng
It is important to learn to divide your writing into paragraphs. That makes it
much easier for the reader to comprehend. Each paragraph contains an idea. When you change the idea somewhat you begin a new paragraph.
You really *must* learn to leave a space after every punctuation mark!
Please capitalize people's names like this: Mary.
Always write the name of a company the way the company writes it. Where theyuse capital letters you do so, too. If they use short forms such as Inc. or
Ltd., for Incorporated, and Limited, you do so, too. Even if they do strange
things like this: "aBc, BlOcKs FOr cHiLdReN, LTD." when you write their name you must do it as they do. If you speak of them casually you can call them aBc, of course, but when you use the name more formally you must write it correctly.
You remembered to capitalize the word English. Good.
You only had one spelling error. Excellent!
I have made some changes in your wording for various reasons. One reason is that a verb must be singular or plural, depending on whether the noun it is related
to is singular or plural. These two *must* agree. They must either be both singular, or both plural.
You did very well. If you do what I have told you regarding paragraphing, space
after punctuation, and agreement between nouns and their verbs, you will have taken some giant steps in your progress toward writing good, professional English
. :-)
Best wishes, Mary
