作文题目是
读JIMMY的信然后给JIMMY写一封建议信,你可以用should shouldn’t could couldn’t
信的内容
Dear Donna
I hate shopping!The stores are always crowded and the shop assistants aren’t usually very friendly.Also it takes me a long time to choose clothes.I want to have cool clothes but i don’t want to shop.What do you think I should do?
JIMMY
我自己写了一篇, 给老师批改了 得了12分(15分满分),但我要求高我想拿到14-15分下面就是我自己写的
I like shopping but there are many stores are crowded either.
I can give you some suggestions.First you shouldn’t buy cool clothes on weekends.You should buy them at night.And you could buy clothes on the Internet.
It is very popular easy and you don’t use a long time to choose clothes.
I believe in the there have many beautiful clothes waiting for you!
Good luck
Donna
如果我有语法错误 请先帮我改过来,然后再写一篇比这个更好的作文,但是一定要按我的思路来!
thank you everyone
I waiting for your answers
參考答案:Dear Jimmy,
I'm very glad to recieve your letter! You said that you hated shopping because it's crowded. But I dont't think so.I think you could go shopping at night.There are a few people in the shop at that time.
Actually, the shops are all crowded on weekends. So it coud be better to buy clothes on internet.It might be more convinient.It won't cost you a lot of time to choose which one you really want to take.I'm sure you'll find many beautiful clothes that you like!
Best wishes for you!
Yours
Donna
